This was inspired by my friend Georgia. XOXO
How can I feel so much pain
yet feel nothing how many times have I been stung
yet never touched by the sting
If forever is a fever if never is never
what good is it to be this fucking clever
I know what I know and write it down to show
but no, I’m a low fellow
I cannot go
that way
what use is useless, clueless
sometimes mostly stupid and tuneless
ostensibly deranged but you knew that
so how can I feel so fucking dead
was it something that was said?
because all I suffer is in my head
but it doesn’t hurt, it’s just the pain in the rain singing my name for another go at the game and it’s such a shame that I cannot feel anything
Because if i could, you would have just broken me…..
So I’m walking away from another car crash
cuts and bruises just like in the past
hurting but I cannot
feel you
But I hope you are feeling all of this goddamn ruin too
it’s just another accident, another wreck on the road
let’s exchange information, will insurance cover the
damages if I explode?
I don’t know, it’s just a good thing I hurt and cannot feel the distress
because my crash into you might have made me
feel even less
WoW!!! this is absolutely amazing………….loved it!!! 🙂 🙂
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thank you my friend! Btw I am enjoying your 31 day poem, it is really good and a lot of fun. Keep up the excellent work and thank you again for reading
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Oh great………coming from you this really means a lot……..to tell you the truth……sometimes i am left speechless to comment anything on your and sudden denouncement poems………..”beautiful” and “loved it” doesn’t cut it……..but i am really inspired by your works! don’t mind my ranting……always a pleasure reading you!! 😀 😀
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You honor me friend.
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all my pleasure……… 😀 😀
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Love how you structured this
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Thanks Rob
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You are welcome!
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This completely sucked me in and demanded to be read out loud. Particularly loved the rhythm and urgency of “but it doesn’t hurt, it’s just the pain in the rain singing my name for another go at the game and it’s such a shame that I cannot feel anything” Sigh. . .
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It was written for a friend going through a tough time, with a little of my own experiences thrown in. Having your heart broken sucks. Thanks for reading!
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Always a pleasure to read your words
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“but it doesn’t hurt, it’s just the pain in the rain singing my name for another go at the game and it’s such a shame that I cannot feel anything
Because if i could, you would have just broken me…..” My god, you hit my soul. Outstanding write.
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Thank you Nicole, and thanks for the reblog 😁
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My pleasure, it’s amazing.
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And so are you!!
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Reblogged this on The Lithium Chronicles and commented:
oldepunk delivers a gut punch of the wickedest sort. This is an outstanding piece of writing.
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This is the poem of my life! You are a pro at the describing of our shattered selves!
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Thanks so much for reading.
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Stunning work!
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Thank you my friend
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Very visceral capture of a gut punch!
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Thanks Aurora
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You are very welcome
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Wow! Outstanding, love the flow. My stomach flipped, edge of my seat reading!
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Thanks so much 🙏❤
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It is amazing to read the amount of comments and the audience you have created. It speaks to the quality of your work. Your poetry is amazing. I need to do a better job keeping up.
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Thank you very much my friend 🙏
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Reblogged this on Sudden Denouement Literary Collective and commented:
Another masterpiece by Dennis.
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Really great piece! I had a bunch of thoughts on it but most were already said by others. I’ll just say that you are a sculptor-conductor with your mastery of language. Well done.
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Thanks so much Eric 🙏
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